How to Create a Bad Impression
with No Effort at All – 4! |
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Due to popular demand, here are more examples of what
not to do in cover letters and basic queries!
As before, these are all real, having been
collected over a few years. Second, with one exception,
these items are from native English speakers. Third,
in order to give you the real effect, we haven't corrected
capitalization, spelling, punctuation, or grammar.
Finally, we have cut out portions of sentences, but
never to create false errors, just to shorten material.
| Applicant's Actual Written
Statement |
What the Employer Might
Think |
| Our name is Jessica and
Edna. We are … interested of working
abroad. We don't know if you offer this
opportunity to [our specialty] but we're
gonna try anyways. |
I can't believe they actually
wrote "gonna" (and "anyways")! |
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| Good afternoon, I am interested
in more information concerning work in
[location], I fit all the qualifications
that are listed. I would appreciate it
if you could send me more information. |
• Could
you tell us what you do?
• Based
on the email, I doubt you "fit all
the qualifications." |
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| i am interested in nusring
position … I have 10 yrs. experience
in OR nursing , with a level one trauma
center and all areas of OR with specialty
in orthopedics, and addition experience
in charge nurse for nights and wekk ends
and hoolidays.. Please provide for me
furter information and the physical requirements
for the jobs. |
Unless you're the reincarnation
of E.E.
Cummings (the poet known for using
unconventional capitalization in his
poems), use proper capitalization (not
to mention punctuation and spelling)! |
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| i have 1 year extensive
experience in Med-surg nursing and Home
Care |
This is clearly impossible. |
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| PLEASE SEND MORE INFO
TO MRS. [last name], R.N. MY ADDRESS
IS 1222 GIRAD ST. NW. |
• It would
help if you told us what city you
lived in – especially because
there's no street by this name in
this city.
• Don't
use all caps – we don't like
being yelled at. |
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| I have been working …
for the past year in a senior nursing
administration position . I would like
to enquire about positions in nursing
administration at the [hospital name
spelled incorrectly and improperly capitalized]
as i am interested in working …
I have over 14 years expierence in nursing
and have a Masters in Business Administration.
I would like some information on Salaries
… |
Another example of someone
who makes the educational system, her/himself,
and her/his profession look bad. |
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| i am a physical therapist
working in usa for the last ten years.i
am us citizin, |
See the note immediately
above, and the note concerning E.E. Cummings. |
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| For personal reasons,
I am exploiting the possibility of working
abroad depending on more lucrative compensation,
financial-wise. |
Come again? |
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To avoid finding something you wrote on this list,
see our helpful articles with tips about spelling,
grammar, punctuation, and presentation in résumés
and cover letters, e.g. Write
the Right Résumé, Write
an Effective Cover Letter, Common
Résumé Mistakes, Proofreading
Tips, Dear
Cindy – A Healthcare Recruiter Driven Crazy
By Jargon, Dear
Cindy – Types of Résumés. .
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Article published on Aug 14
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